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kind of felt, to me - like a slightly strained piece of formal writing by someone who wouldn't usually write that way. seemed attention to metre was as much of a consideration as meaning - and in this, similar to the straighter stuff i wrote at uni, seeing how the other half lived. i think if you're planning to write in more disciplined manner, this phase, where the two don't quite gel (and the musicality overwhelms the 'meaning') is something you've got to go through.
the 'nursery rhyme for adults' schtick can get incredibly whimsical, but i think you manage to avoid the worst of that.
actually, in style and content, is vee vee similar to poem i wrote back in the day called 'crack stars'. |
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