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Hourglass

 
 
Benny the Ball
12:30 / 05.02.07
I was looking through an hourglass, just the other day,
wondering if each grain of sand had a predestined sense
of when it should fall, as if each one were numbered.
I thought to myself, how does it know to run for exactly one hour,
and so decided to time it, just to make sure.
I watched each grain fall slowly, swirl and drawl, slipping
down the pinched neck into the catchment below,
thinking how it might never run out, how each piece could be
a piece of god, endless and infinite, forever there.
But run out it did. I checked my watch,
fifty eight minutes.
 
 
astrojax69
00:25 / 13.02.07
well, patently, mr the ball, the title should be 'fifty eight minute glass'...

i must say, while i liked very much the allusions to the sense of infinity played with in a defined space, and attributions of inevitabiity, i did think the way the first line ran would lead me into a lilting lyrical and rhyming poem.

what sort of feedback are you after? mebbe could have been a 'daily poem' post? but lovely, really.
 
 
Benny the Ball
06:48 / 13.02.07
thanks astrojax - any feedback really is happily received. Poetry is not really my forte, but I'm trying out a couple of things. Probably not daily though! Maybe every couple of weeks or so - but I'll keep them in this thread anyway....

Thanks again.
 
  
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