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quote:They were sprawled on top of the sheets, sweaty and out of breath.
ok, not too bad yet, but Im already a bit wary - looks like the classic opening for a cheesy sex scene/pillow talk session.
quote:"You're a Sex God,"
ok, that cinches a great big "yark"
seriously
quote:Clark said, his voice vibrating in Lex's ear.
by itself not so awful but coupled with the above line, it simply becomes a drizzling of cheese on a cheese souffle
quote:"Why thank you, Clark. I may have to add that title to my business cards."
this could be read as sarcasm, which, when used as a response to the above statement, would normally elicit a giggle from this reader. however, in keeping with the tone of it all Id have to guess its intent is sarcasm-free and effectively sets the whole thing into cheese-overdrive |
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