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Wow. You guys rule.
Um, criticism-wise: mostly plot. The people in my workshop were under the impression that this was all a feverdream that a schizophrenic was having. Which it's not. So I'm testing my theory that people who "get it" will get it. Basically, that 'lithers, being pretty much exactly who I imagine reading this one day, will be able to get what's going on, if anyone can.
There are twee bits, i know, and I apologize. That's the other thing. Some of the parts have been written at different times, and I've been accused of grinding the gears a bit between sections, where the narration changes its voice, so I was hoping people could point out where the changes are abrupt. As well, I have a nagging suspicion that some things are... out of continuity?
Basically, I'm sure there are parts that don't make sense, but I want to make sure that they're insensible because I wrote them poorly, rahter than because the reader isn't familiar with the, uh... genre. |
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